by JohnAphros
It was a short first chapter but I'm a sucker for an under dog story.
Now it will be interesting to see how things develop for Thomas.
and the publishing of this story should have been pushed back. This chapter sets up a nice story world to work from but it is easily forgotten if you don't follow through quickly.
I agree with the others that this is a great intro. It set up the situation well and gave us a start on understanding the main character. I do want to read more.
I fact that is the biggest complaint I have. I thought this should have been longer. It stops just as we are being drawn in. But as a first post, I can imagine wanting feedback might be worth pushing this out early.
A great start!
The possibilities are endless. I look forward to learning about his gift and how it will impact TNT's life. Your writing style paints clear images and develops interesting characters. Keep it coming:)
It is a good introduction. I am moving on to chapter 2. Look forward to seeing how this one evolves.