All Comments on 'A Good Movie'

This is so hot

Don't write any more if this is the best you can do

tbh this is shit

you were doing so good till you got to the attic, there it was like lighting to fast, you should have stayed with the prolong

It took a very long time for you to make so little progress within the story. Too verbose in places where it should brief, and too brief in places where more detail was needed. his is erotica. Weakness in plot can not be compensated with unnecessary detail. Work on outline and strong themes within the story.

"... regret at her temporary inability to communicate without awkwardice." Ooooh, how awkward. Awkwardice isn't a word. Awkwardness is.

Zzzzzzz.......🥱