All Comments on 'A Guy and His...? Ch. 41: Unification'

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Anonymousalmost 7 years ago

Continuity & punctuation.

A really good story with interesting twists an turns.

... BUT ... Desperately needs an editor. Construction is poor. Punctuation is terrible.

Get some help, 'My Man.

MarkT63 almost 3 years ago

Still 5 stars!!!

Anonymous3 months ago

Continuing to write v well. Well done!

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