by victoriawhita
Oh my God...what a luscious story, excellently written, and most excellently climaxed, the beginning as good as the ending. Wishing I were there...
This was one of your best that I've read so far. It helped that I was reading about sex before I came here. I'm slightly surprised how some of my own writings are like yours.
I enjoy a variety of Literotica stories and have recently been exploring the Romance section more. I enjoyed that you made me care about the two people and that you make your characters real people. Nicely written dialogue and sex/love scene. I will read your other stories. Thanks for a nice, enjoyable story.
worth more then 5 stars worth more then a 100.
a pure gem of a story,
well written and well crafted, yep warm and cosy.
but the random capitals, stilted dialog, and abrupt switching of viewpoints distracted me too much. It could be a very good story with some work, and better editing.
I couldn't even finish this story due to the bad grammar and punctuation. It seemed to have a good concept but it needs an editors help.
This was a pretty good story. But the capitalizing of the entire first word of every new paragraph was ANNOYING AS HELL!!!!! Please don’t do that. Please? please??