All Comments on 'A Lady of Neverwinter'

For me, your changing of tenses took me out of it...

This is a delightful ménage tale, sensual and with decent world-building (not easy in a piece this short). Some of the descriptive language threw me, though-- 'saccharine' doesn't mean what Rosaeveningtar thinks it does, for example. The phrase "with smooth sashays of her dancerly hips" broke me up, breaking the mood; 'dancerly' isn't actually a word, and 'sashay' isn't something one can normally do in bed... but it did get its idea across. Five stars, and this really should be Chapter 3 in a fantasy novel!