All Comments on 'A Little Bit Deeper Now Ch. 02'

Someone has never heard of blackmail charges; for the brother & sister in this story.

we have a story in LW that should be in Gay Male.

put this crap in gay male where it belongs you sick little fuck!!!!

you're a disgrace for the men. you're sick.

How can people stand to read this drivel? I had to cut it short!)

Idiots.

Who is the ass hole who put this shit in L.W. this is fetish, non con. or gay but not this. Terrible, you are destroying what's left of Lit.

I got news for you my fellow anonymiti: your rants are not going to get the Lit Administration to change any thing. You continue to read these free stories and pretend to hate them. If you really didn,'t like them you wouldn't read them but since you do there is only one conclusion that can be drawn. The reason you write such gross sick comments is because you are disgusted with yourselves for liking this type of story. Lit probably likes the rants since it shows you are reading and engaged in the stories. If you wanted to make a difference you wouldn't read and add to the number of people reading the story. Just my anonymous thoughts.

;)

I see what you're doing here. It's clever, I have to admit. It's no surprise that some of the knuckledraggers who have commented don't get it, but I have a feeling they will by the end.

The thing is, this chapter is in the wrong category. The first one could have been called Loving Wives, with Wifey cheating on Hubby with the sociopathic little punk. This one is purely NonConsent/Reluctance, though. They're now being overtly forced against their will, with the blackmail hanging over their heads.

You do have a point there. The problem is, I've received pushback in the past for changing a categories within a series based on what happens in each installment. It sometimes seems like you're damned if you do, damned if you don't.

Keep it in LW. That's where it started.

Interesting, grabs your attention. It is like watching an automobile crash/accident.

You cannot stop !

For the husband he should look for allies. The enemy of my enemy is my friend,lol.

AMerryMan

But the fact is he is still bi. Now he can keep his career and his rep. I am interested in what his sister has in her evil mind. Good start, this could and will twist in so many different directions. Paul is going to be a bottom boy if he goes to jail or he can be one for one semester. But by then, he might be hooked on having his pussy fucked and stretched.

Interesting twist. I hope the author continues with this story. It's gotten interesting.

Not my cup of tea.

A crap story

Merry Christmas Dear Annony!

me thinks erotic horror .. or just plain old HORROR

is the best place for this story .

totaly insane ..

5 stars .

ALL DRIBBEL OF THIS SICK & RETARDED SCRIBBLER ONE PISS STAR BOMBED OUT.

SAME PROCEDURE EVERY NEXT DAY.

Harry in VA's Witness

You should just dive deeper than they want... and in this case, beat BOTH of them to death.

I mean in real life, Simon and the wreck that is his sister would both be dead. And they would die very unpleasantly. And you know what? No one, not even the police would even care.

This would be such a slam dunk for "justifiable homicide" that it would make law review.

What does he mean how are they going to get out of this or fight back? This requires no elaborate plans to get out from under. You start beating and this time don't stop until their hearts do. Period.

For writing such a piece of shit like you are yourself.

Congrats. A well written story. Four out of five. It isn't really my cup of tea, but I admire the technical skill. I will probably check back to see if it continues and see if the husband and wife can escape Simon's clutches. Steve

drevil

are sexual blackmailers always stupid enough to force a man to get his mouth...with a row of razor sharp teeth and strong jaw muscles... even close to their cock? Bite down hard and shake your head til you bite it off him, and watch him bleed out, smiling all the while.

Started where's the Finish like when Does Paul Strangle the Little Prick & his Sister and then his Wife he can be Declared Insane and go to a Hospital .

what intelligent person is going to submit to blackmail with no return of pics and video. He could have taped the blackmail at his house and had Simon arrested. This happened in NZ a few years ago. The perp got arrested all evidence was seized and suppressed so no one knew the names involved. If Simon or sister released the info they could be arrested for breach of privacy and sued for damages, they and/or their parents would be paying big time. You can't film some one with out their permission. In a case in USA the perp got three years in jail. This is just another stupid tale written for most impact with little reality to entertain any one with half a brain. Just Crap. TK

Horrible

cuck shit.

How is it nobody in these stories ever has a set of BALLS?

What was the purpose for you to write this, hell I don't know what to call this pile of words. (Crap) I read for the fun of it but, there is no fun or enjoyment in this pile of words. Total waste, time I've lost forever, the world doesn't spin with piles of words in this order. I hope you didn't spend money to learn how to pile words in this order.

This story is not to my liking, you placed everything in sequence in your writing but, people can over look something's in a likable story. You missed the mark, this story was not likable. Even your characters aren't likable nor we we know anything. Maybe somebody will like a story where the blackmailer wins. It takes all types of people to make up the world.

Real fucking fagot ass-wipe you are!

What a bunch of crap!!! MINUS 5*!!!!

Rich kids and their fucked up lives. Me, I'd of gotten a gun off the streets and killed ALL three of them.

Then you do what you need to do. First have the wife step outside the room as a lookout. Then kill the sister in front of Simon. Finally kill Simon. Their lives were already ruined. They had to walk away and start over somewhere else. At least the evil kids wouldn't hurt anyone else.

I read the first part of this story and didn't likle it. You didn't give Paul any kind of brain at all, Beverly? Paul didn't have a wife, since after only three weeks she was already making plans to leave with Simon when he went off to college. I read the second part to see if there was any kind of resolution. But it went from bad to worse. I'm glad you decided to end it there as I can't imagine what you could have done to make it worse. This was the first story i've read from you and it will be my last. After this story Im can't imagine you doing any better with the rest of your stories and I don't want to find out how you could make another story worse. I'm not an analist, but I would like to suggest you get some kind of help with your stories.

It appears that for what ever reason some don't care for your story. I found it interesting and well written. While I would normally give it four stars I'm giving it five stars hoping it pisses off the haters!

The root canal was better. Asshole bailed.on chapter three. May be a good thing.

at some point you would just murder your tormentors because you are backed into a corner, and you might as well get justice with just a few bullets. I doubt Simon would have lived past chapter 1 in anyplace other than New York or California. Not smart to be in someone's home with no witnesses.

murder, becoming a pet, or suicide, TK U MLJ LV NV

I know this is older, but here I go!

While I'm sure there are those who would differ, but IMHO, you should decide on what the overall theme of the entire story is, and put each chapter in that category.

Tag each chapter appropriately, and put a note in the beginning, as you did in chapter one, alerting readers as to what to expect in future chapters. As you say, you will still get bitching, but at least you'll have done all that you can do,

Went from disgusting to stupid... Husband had no logical reason to give in to the blackmail... Cut the wife loose and let her sink... Then when everything had died down... Put a bullet in the punks head...

-jaye-

It's just a totally unbeliveably "story"

For all the sense this made, you might as well have let your dog run randomly over the keyboard.

On the surface these two chapters seem sick,twisted,and disgusting,but if you look deeper I think both Simon and his Sister are trying to persuade Beverly and Paul to join them for a glorious bisexual incest 4some,cause Simon clearly asked Paul if he wanted to suck his cock in the first chapter,and Paul had had some dealings in highschool or college.

As for Miranda I get she wants both Beverly and Paul to join them.Granted they are blackmailing Paul and Beverly I think after the initial shock they could all be great loving friends and fuckbuddies and Simon and Miranda would drop the blackmail issue,so to the author I hope he decides to finish this story to give it a decent ending.

Awful, horrible story and it is unfinished. Unfinished stories always get 1/5.

What a little wimp of a husband. He figuratively has the shit's future in his hand, if only he knew how manipulate the system he controls, and what does he do? Let's himself get dictated to by some little shit stain and a girl. Why the fuck is he even still in the same room as his wife. What a waste of testosterone both of the males in this story are.

This story is utter nonsense. How in the hell did the husband ever earn a Doctrate being that stupid and spineless.

Don't bother to finish this screwed up farce of a story. Just plain awful. If I could give negative stars for this, I would.

really bad

wrong category. Should be gay or non-consent. Paul just needs to make sure Simon and Miranda's bodies are never found. Then he needs to bounce his completely idiotic wife to the curb.

Again, just stupid. All the husband had to do was show detectives the letter and money saying Simon, sounds gay, attempted violence when he refused to go along. He was on private property. Retaliation by the headmaster in both parts was too easy. I quit after the hospital thing. This had promise if it went a different direction.