All Comments on 'A Loner Mentalist Pt. 07'

Great chapter, as always! Thanks for writing!

Like the thoughtfulness in the story and good continuity.

Nice writing

Ive been checking in eagerly waiting for the next installment and it was everything I hoped for. But now I have the same problem again...waiting for the next chapter!

Holy shnikes man. I mean, it makes a sense... but man, some things we just wish we didn't have to know. Forewarned is Fourarmed, and we need the weapons.

Poor Mia. Trying her best.

well done, syck! yours is one of the few stories I've enjoyed and check in for. Thanks for a well-written story, and for the thought that went into it. One of the best on the forum! Fun to see where this is going. Jack's turning into a very serious guy, but nice to know that he likes to play once in a while...after all, all work and no play... :-)

and haunting of movies. Perhaps that is what these stories have in common. Young females.

Bah, I came up with this at the beginning of the chapter and you'd already resolved it by the end with a new plot device, but when I read about mind control over the phone I thought a good way for someone like Mia to defend would be to introduce some noise on an unidentified phone call, by playing sounds into her ear or being somewhere loud, enough to distract from the caller's message but not so much as to make the message inaudible. That way the mind would be focused less on the words themselves and more on resolving the message from the noise. Unless the other side knows what is going on it would be hard to guess what is happening.

This was an amazing chapter. This story is so well thought out, it makes me wonder why is this not a paperback! Looking forward to next installment!

for your lovely words of support and appreciation.

The source of my idea for telekinesis was one of Arthur C. Clarke's books on the paranormal, that I read way back when I was a kid. I also saw it on an episode of Angel.

I'm happy people think about my stories and the mechanics of the powers, but I've gotta tell you that the static idea wouldn't work in my story. So long as a person could make out the words being said, they have them in their mind and that's a big target for a mentalist.

Season's greetings!

maybe you could make a story disconnected from angst but in the same universe.

my favorite was the last chapter. however, i think his powers were more versatile and complex before. liking the freestyle feel during combat.

that super vamp should have the power to fix his magic and connect it into the new interface. he could re-invent her as a more modern version that serves him.

just some suggestions no pressure.

oh yeah i am liking on this series but his powers seem both very absolute and very useless. perhaps he could sift through the detritus from the experience of that old gypsy. he might find a hidden gem.

and i like the creativity you added to this one in power use.

outsider was powerful in its broad strokes, i would very much like to see more.

especially if it is a little more refined.

now; i have deigned to encourage. feel encouraged.

thank you for inspiring me. kind regards, with baited breath.

Killing me with your wordyness. Tighten it up. Sex scenes way over the top. Tell the story please.

Repetitive

Predictable

No character growth

Too long

Bye Bye

You’ve obviously never been to NYC. There’s no way he drove an RV into the city and parked in the street around the corner from the hotel. The city is too crowded to find street parking and, if by some chance he did, you’ve got alternate day parking in effect which would require he move the RV to the other side of the street on specific days. And there’s no way he parked his RV in the street and didn’t find it stripped to the frame the next day, unless he left his dogs in there… and don’t get me started on the laws against leaving your pets in a vehicle unattended.