All Comments on 'A Midnight Snack - The Appetizer'

... and I am waiting impatiently for the next chapter! thanks for your efforts. I will need to check out your other works.

And I'm definitely ready for more.

for the next chapter. Nice work, thanks.

for they didn't have a midnight snack! lol

Nice start, although much too short!

It was a good start u need to write more soon

continue, please.

Venus, You've outdone yourself or maybe I shouldn't say that yet as I along with others breathlessly await the next chapter. So beautiful how you take us inside Kat's head and heart. Love the tenderness mixed with raw passion.

ALL OF THE STORY! I think it was terrific up to this point, but we will eagerly anticipate the rest of the story.

A good story leaves you wanting more. Thats the way I felt.

why was this in the incest area nothing happened? long somewhat boring and they never even touch each other what a waste of time

Good start to what I'm looking forward to as a great story. The one reader apparently didn't realize it was the beginning of a series. No sex so I can't give it a five, but a four for how well you set up what's bound to come next.

I was wondering was English your second language. I ask because you don't use contractions when necessary. Ex: "Cut it out Mikey, you are staring at my boobs." That sentence comes off as robotic. It should be, "Cut it out Mikey, you'e staring at my boobs." It reads much better and keeps the story flowing smoothly. Every time I read a sentences sans contractions it just deflates my enjoyment of the story. Good luck and remember, CONTRACTIONS ARE GOOD!

what a wonderful start of what i am sure will be a great story.. It is of interest to me due in part that i have an older brother. (step) what have teasing attitude and openness that is hard to find/

Thanks for your comments- sorry I haven’t been able to put my fingers to the keyboard to writing more parts. Here is hoping 20 23 brings me more time