All Comments on 'A New Day Dawns for Susan Pt. 01'

to laugh at the punchline - thanks!

Thanks. My last buildup to a punchline was two stories and 9 chapters, so I'm working on getting to it quicker.

What's the music intro have to do with your story?

Susan's world is changing like the woman in the song. Sometimes it's something that popped into my head while writing about it. This time, I thought the song fit what's going on in this story.

It's a great story but for me personally the writing

Is too chopped up and it just doesn't flow for me.

Thanks:)

Ed