by tastycandy
I’ve been waiting a long time for this story to come to fruition, and this is the payoff chapter? It was a mess, with too much too fast. Not at all what I was expecting from you. Chapters 1-6 were such a nice, slow burn - and then to devolve into 2 pages of 6th grade plot was, well, just disappointing. I know you can do better as I’m a fan of most of your stories.
Here’s my suggestion, slow it down again, this story works so much better when there is some sexual tension between the characters. I’m not saying stop them from having them fuck each other silly, but build it up a bit with some flirting and eroticism and not jump right into bathroom threesomes and strap on sex. Build that shit up!!
I still love the storyline, and look forward to the continued series, thanks for your time writing these...
Love it. I'm ready for the next installment! lol I have enjoyed reading this story. Thanks for your time and imagination.
Hi Candy,
Five stars for originality. Typos and grammar boo boos were distracting. I can't wait til the husband makes an appearance. Some pegging would be nice!
I love this story you should keep going I say you make the new chapter come out next week
Seems like Jason is ready for his father/husband to come home now.
Time to reveal the next Chapter please!!!
So don't leave us hanging! Did they ever swap back?
Did his father/husband return to his sexy wife/son???