by Clea
nice story but too little sex and what there was of it you took to lomg to get to it.
This is a potentially nice little story spoiled by silly mistakes (spelling, grammar, construction). Examples: you write "allot" (to divide or distribute) when you mean "a lot"; you write "to" when it should be "too"; you write "two" when it should be "to". Clea, if you want to be a writer, then you have to get the basics right, otherwise it just makes your work look sloppy and gives an impression that you do not care about it.