All Comments on 'A Night Out'

so this is my first go at something like this.. i hope you all like reading it as much as i liked writing it!

This was great, I totally loved it. Gave me ideas too ;)

Keep going!

Short (but not too short) and hot. Great job!

What would make it perfect? Fixing the typo (damn->dam) and maybe a couple of slightly smoother transitions (from unknown relationship to people who have fucked before, from her cumming to her on her knees).

I hope to see more from you in the future!