All Comments on 'A Night to Remember'

Beautiful and intimate story. I am very wet, thank you. Please write more.

it was nice, but i think several more chapters need to be to\ld.

Seems like more time should have been spent leading up to jumping into bed.

..but watch your storyline. Some of your descriptions seem to be afterthoughts and out of order. I find that literally reading out loud helps. If it's not the way you'd talk, then it shouldn't be the way you'd write. But a very good first effort.