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Click hereMaloth shook his head as his vision returned to normal, showing him the room in Waterfell rather than the strange city. The prickling heat subsided as he glanced at Shenla, who's eyes were wide, her breasts heaving as she panted.
"What was that?" His sister asked him breathlessly, a touch of fear in her tone.
Maloth shook his head. "I don't know, Shenla." He hated not knowing; ignorance was weakness.
"My Lord? Lady Shenla?" Morin asked, concerned.
Maloth waved her off. "We are fine, Morin. This plane takes some adjusting to, it would seem."
Morin nodded, satisfied. "Then in summary, my Lord, we will approach Amindaer, and attempt to parley. Might I suggest gathering as many risen dead as we can between here and Amindaer?"
Maloth gave his agreement, feeling a little more relaxed as Shenla's hand resumed its insistent tugging on his shaft. There was something about that vision that bothered him greatly; he just wished he knew what. Deciding to put his concerns aside for now, he focused on his plans.
Securing Amindaer would give him a huge strategic advantage, and a coastal fortress was likely to have ships, or at least shipyards. Between here and Amindaer, he would use his undead army to force the citizens of Palistair to his service, or he would kill them and they would serve anyway.
With a large enough force, and several ships, he could be across the sea and invading Ekistair in months, finally reclaiming what his mother had meant for he and his sister all those years ago.
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END OF CHAPTER 13
- COMMENTS
Antidariusalmost 7 years agoAuthorFor the feedback - I greatly appreciate it, and as I'm doing this on my own, including the editing, it helps to get some perspective from the readers. Cheers!
hellinahelmetalmost 7 years agoHow you´re keeping the threads weaving in and out of the plot is great...doing well, this was an easy 5* Anti...thanks again for you time and effort into this story...
Anonymousalmost 7 years agoAs I said, you have a good storyline and a good premise going on here. I do have a couple of critiques though. First, maybe put some more detail into the story, lengthen it a little bit. Secondly, some more background on the stories that surround how events came to be at their present state, (i.e. more details about the Darkening, the various groups and orders of the world, etc.,) Finally, slow the pace a little, let the story build up some more before having events proceed.
Anonymousalmost 7 years agoI stayed for a story written with skill and detail that rivals that of some fantasy nove\s.
calista241almost 7 years agoReally enjoying it. I like the arc of Aran and the Paladins a little better though.
