All Comments on 'A Personal Moment to Share with You'

To many grammar errors and missing words. Perhaps English isn't your first language? Unfortunately it made the story too distracting to get into.

I agree with the other post. The lack of proper english was very distracting

I am so sorry about how this got spelled incorrectly, and my punctuation was terrible too. I went to writing class; after going over it with teacher, and learned how to write with spelling, put things written in correct order, and how to write things by individuals when they talk. Check out my other one, and you will see the difference.

5🌟's. I'm enthralled with the story though it very poorly. Try using grammar check or a friend even another writer from Literotica. To edit your submissions.