by dawn1958
This story was done before--either by you or someone else.
We've read this story before.
Dawn1958 did say is a revision of an old stories and will write new chapters. Still a good story please continue
Are u continuing this story?
You have the blokes truly confused. Tim and Jim are the same bloke but you really messed that bit up!! You really need to get a real editor, one who can separate out when the bloke was Tim and when the bloke was Jim. It really fucked up the story to confuse the two blokes. No more please. Find another life. Writing these types of stories is not your forte!
This is why blackmail stories -- at least one where the reason for the blackmail and the payment are both sexual -- are inherently moronic.
...the new version continues or surprises what the older version included, i am all for it. i loved the original, that is fosur!
This is my first time reading this story. i have enjoyed reading it and look forward to reading the next chapter. i do agree that you should have someone proofread for you to avoid editing issues (ie: the confusion of the guy's name changing from Tim to Jim), but otherwise i think the story has alot of potential. keep writing. *grins*
I don't like my Blackmail with a side of third parties. I mean if I was going to blackmail someone, I can't imagine loaning them out to strangers. Its just too much of a risk, as well as too close to getting off on cuckolding (someone banging your wife in front of you) for my tastes.
I vaguely remember the 'Sky' blackmail story from before but this one is good. Keep writing regardless of some of the negative comments - by Anonymous - because they will only make them as long as they remain unknown. As a writer here I get lots of negative comments and over the years they have, with one exception, been Anonymous. The people that leave good comments and feedback identify themselves - even ask that I notify them when posting new stories.
Why isn't Kerri 58 years old, very married, absolutely loyal and careful, but hasn't had sex in years? Think about the inner struggle and her constant thoughts. Her religious and moral upbringing is at stake but her body was slowly moving towards her submission. If you have ever spent time with mature women between 50 and 70 who are in great shape mentally and physically, you would grasp the sexuality being proposed here. think about it!
You state you will write more about this subject. I, for one, can't wait!!! YOMEYO
Suddenly the idea of getting some piercings seems oddly desirable... ;)
This is the same story as your 2005 series 'A Teacher's Past' isn't it? So what is the difference between this and that 2005 series?
Ethically Appalled. Normally I don’t find this kind of thing stimulating but the level of sexual satisfaction portrayed in the heroin excited me beyond words.
I'm on page 3 right now. Is it Tim or Jim?
I was on the 1st page when I asked who Jim was?
Bro, as a million people have said, who the heck is Jim and Tim? More specifically, which of them is doing what? Are they both blackmailing her? Is it a typo? This only gets more confusing in the following parts.
And it really, really hurts the story. Hard to understand how much it hurts the story.