All Comments on 'A Rainy Night in London'

There are grammar issues and places where I was confused (how did you know she was a stone butch? I didn.t understand the guilt) but it was hot! I love the atmosphere and character description. Keep writing!

Liked it alot. I assume she is stone because of the pillow princess comment. I'd really like to see what the butch has in mind...

FiveWolves - the butch's comment about wanting a "pillow princess" is the tipoff for her being a stone butch. I found this recently (at http://afemmeinnyc.wordpress.com):

" Pillow princess: a femme who is the bottom

during sex and doesn’t do anything for her partner."

If you want a pillow princess, you're probably a stone butch.

I liked the story. I'd like it more if I understood why the protagonist is so quiet.

Hope theirs more to come from these two!!!!

TYGZ... Thanks... That helped explain it :)

Super hot story!

I also hope there is more to cum. I believe the story has a lot more to tell.

Flip, was meant to give you a 5 but the internet has been updated and works so much faster that an errant tap gave you only a 4. When I started that story, it was just mild curiosity as I don't normally like the butch stories but you drew me in so cleverly with such a beautiful slow tease. Thank you. Keep writing!

Excellent story. Great emotional interplay and word choice. Fun characters.

Apparently I need to better research labels. I thought a pillow princess was just a selfish chick and a stone butch was just hyper-masculine. I'd no concept of the complexity of idenity and desire there. Glad your characters found each other.

Seriously! Your description of the butch girl made me drool. I only wish I knew her name! I'd definitely love to read more with these two characters.

Thanks so much for the great read. All my encouragement for another chapter as I would to find out more about these two lovers.

Thank you for your hard work.

Doc

it is lovely .I know my words cannot justify its beauty. thanks to shearing. plz continue this ....

Thankyou so much I am so glad that you seemed to like it, there will be follow up chapters in the new year, I know my grammar is not the best and am hoping to improve that. If you want to know more about why I am so quiet maybe read the next chapter when it comes out maybe I'll put it in just for info lol .......

Nice story but a minor thing - you might want to watch the lengths of some of the paragraphs, if only because reading on a computer is more taxing on the eyes and shorter paragraphs with more white space seems to ease that. I was told that early in my writing by a couple of readers and they might have been right but the story itself is more than fine :)

gotherella, I think you already have pretty damn good writing skills. Write as you are comfortable with.

Don't let the Anal/OCD's interfere with your perspective for some obsolete rote for allegedly proper english.

I am of the opinion that you have a talent for creating characters and a visual atmosphere for them to emote in. And your erotic passages are sexy as hell!

I look forward to new postings from you. If you want a little brainstorming. How about a background story for each of your two main characters? Then maybe a follow-up, lots of possibilities?

Also the butch and femme at the first table and the little mousy girl hiding behind the book? Each has a story for you to describe. The Club itself must have interesting character of its own tales to tell?

You are truly an amazing writer and definitely wrote out a fantasy of mine. I would not change a thing about this story. Definitely becoming one of my favs 😉

Thanks

I totally loved this story, and really wish you had written a second chapter (hint?). Thanks for sharing it with us!

This is one of the best stories I’ve read on Literotica. My only disappointment was to find that there was no sequel.

Thank you. A great first chapter, so much more to discover about both girls. Please consider carrying on with another chapter, the characters are interesting and thete is so much more to know about them and their new romance.