All Comments on 'A Raise By Any Other Name'

I can't wait for you to write more. I loved how at the end she turned out to be his boss, after he thought he had the power over her.

Well written, especially for a first effort. The sex was hot, although it wouldn't hurt to draw it out a little more. I think they need to have another encounter. I also wish that she was MY boss.

Throbbin -- I understand this is your first submission.... Excellent job for a first piece. The criticism I would offer you is mostly minor: a run-on sentence here, some word tense miss-matches there. Nothing major. If you'd like more detailed feedback, let me know (AlexDescends@literotica.org). I think it's great that you're contributing to the community in this fashion.

Alex

The first rule of fiction is that it must be believable.

This story is totally implausible.

VERY HOT GREAT DETAIL

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Enjoyed the topic, and it contained all the elements of good fun, and it reminded me of some fun I once had many years ago :0)

Very hot. Will there be another meeting of the two?

Blistering hot. More! More!