All Comments on 'A Random Encounter?'

I was for sure that they both were cheating on their spouses, but the twist at the end of the story was refreshingly naughty.

Thanks for the good story

Glad to see a married couple enjoying themselves without cheating on each other its a pity the cucks and wimps and sluts won't like this story and will crucify anyone that DOES like it.

But it was well done in this edition!

Here, or under this name, whatever. True, the story line is not new, but you dropped in the twist in a nicely understated way. There is some foreshadowing - a couple that heads off to the hotel without at least trying to find out if the other is a recently released axe murderer is either terminally stupid (and these characters don't feel like that) or they have some history.

The big nice thing though, (and let's hear a hand for authors who celebrate it!) is that people who are married to each other for years, have children, etc., occasionally look at each other and say,"Wow! I like him!" Okay, make your own substitutions, but the sentence, "Wow! I like/love/lust after him/her!" was just a real non-starter.

Keep writing, please.

elegant.caenorrhabditis

Fun with a married couple. On the other hand, fucking in public places is a little risky. It is amazing how cops can sneak up on you when you are not paying attention. I know, they have interrupted me in mid-fuck on a couple of occasions. Sneaky bastards.

What a lucky guy!!!!!!!!!

About the worst on this site !

Then I rated the garbage 1*.

This is a real loving wife story!

Yes, I admit, with the foreshadowing, and I dunno- a 6th sense?- I DID guess the ending, but MY take was going to be that they were an estranged couple, separated and trying to reconnect despite his heavy work schedule. That said, happily married, and indulging in fantasy play to keep the marriage hot is still a great theme for this loving wives category. I have to say my favorite bit is his fumbled attempt at "picking her up" with a line, and how she concedes to sit back down with an assurance that her hubby doesn't do this thing very often and has no real world experience in being a lothario. That is why SHE has to indulge this fantasy for him. You get a sense that she understands how much he needs her, and that his working hard isn't a slight against her, but rather a sacrifice FOR her, and this fantasy play, is what she can do for him, to proove (what you set the reader up to assume) that she DOES love him, as much as he obviously loves her. Whether the storyline plot has been done before or not, it is always fun to read a new version, and when it works, well......It WORKS! Thankyou!

Cute short; never saw it coming

doesn't go wrong. 5 stars

and not very good.

Very nice account of a loving couple keeping it spicy.

The negative morons probably are pissed that the woman is not cheating and bringing a cream pie home to her frilly pantied husband.

That was a neat little surprise. I didn't see that one coming.

If they are married, this line makes no sense:

"He must have stared too long because Donna was thinking "God, what a complete jerk!", and spun away from him, dismissing him from her thoughts and getting ready to leave."

A dim and clumsy version of a common ‘surprise twist.’

“It’s like beef stew honey, but instead of exchanging the beef with canned mackerel like I did last time, I used mothballs!! Isn’t that a hoot?!’

JMAS

Not a bad twist. It pissed the cucks off.

Badly done example of an old trope.

It’s kind of a cheat when the narrator tells you what the characters are thinking and you learn at the end the narrator was lying. Have to avoid that for this sort of story to work.

The question is, how long was Donna in that bar before Charlie came and how many dicks did she suck? And maybe not just sucked? It is possible that she took off her panties in the ladies' room because their dampness would be difficult to explain by natural hydration from sexual arousal. Moreover, she admitted to herself that she came to the bar for the first time in many years in order to try something new. And what could be newer than the members of strangers? And then, taking advantage of the opportunity, masquerading with the juices of excitement, feed someone else's sperm to an ignorant hubby and give him sloppy seconds. Voila - the cuckold is ready.

The writer is writing of feelings and thoughts that don't exist and are inconsistent with the actual story as opposed to the one he is trying to get into readers' minds by misleading them. To give one of many possible examples the words "Donna was thinking "God, what a complete jerk!"" were not true and there can be no point to them other than to deceive the readers.

Characters should be consistent and writers should be careful with their words to avoid actually lying to the readers. 1 star.