All Comments on 'A Ripe Peach'

I liked your story, but I would like to know a little more about the characters. Was she married? Who was the guy? Why the sudden attraction? What was her motivation for going to the bedroom with him? We need to care for them, to identify. This was "wham-bam-thank-you-mame."

Write again and feed it to us more slowly to get us interested. Build the tension.