by XXNoraJeanXX
Never to old to learn new tricks! Especially with a smile and a chuckle!
I like the way you write....and your editing isn't bad either!!
NORA JEANXX ARE U KIDDING ME? THIS A COMICAL VERSION? IT WAS DOWNRIGHT HOT. gAVE ME A THROBBING COCK! I ALWAYS WONDERED WHAT A WOMAN WAS LIKE IN THE THROES OF PASSION. KEEP UP THE GREAT WRITING.
of satisfaction rather than a laugh ... nicely done ... enjoyed the female point of view ... leto-423
If your intent was truly to elicit a laugh or two, consider your work a success! Even as a guy, I remember my first trip to an adult store and you described your character's discomfort quite well! I wish I'd have met a Matilda to aid my search, but all I recall is a scummy, cigarette smoking fat dude sitting behind the register staring at me with disdain, as if I was interrupting his own personal masturbation time rather than supporting his business. Anyhow...you got right into Leanne's head! Your description of her fumbling attempts to use her new toy were spot on...you seem more comfortable writing the sex scenes than the background and set up, but I look forward to reading more of your submissions! Humorous and arousing - not an easy task, but one you accomplished here! Thanks for sharing!