All Comments on 'A Secret Even to Myself Ch. 01'

While you've given intriguing insights to the two main characters and laid out an interesting, albeit somewhat derivative storyline, I find your improper grammar, habitual use of wrong tense, and lack of adequate punctuation to be distracting to the point of irritation. I plan to continue with your story, but if Ch. 02 turns out to be as "MESSY" as this one (and you announced that the novel will be MESSY) I will simply give up! Sorry, I like the the idea, but I don't have the energy or desire to continue to work my way through writing lapses (nor have you indicated why I should).

I enjoyed this introduction to the characters and look forward to reading more. I did notice some errors but was able to follow along very easily.