by subslutjenna
I'm not really into girl on girl, and the two story lines clashed with each other a bit, but overall, a hot little read. Keep this up. Bravo!
This story belongs in the nonconsent/reluctance group, as she was kidnapped and being forced into this "lifestyle". She is not giving, it is being taken from her.
Good storyline but each episode maybe needs to be longer to confirm the momentum well created.
I usually like stories like yours however, I'm really turned off by you taking such a nice gal down the road to serve whomever. Keeping it a lesbian theme, yes. But forcing her to have sex with others, nope. Lost my interest.
Jane seems to be a torture queen and a brutal bitch at that. Take someone's life away, blackmail them, then beat them if they don't comply. Pitty someone doesn't find Jane the bitch in a dark secluded place and use a bat or tire iron to "re-arrange" her pathetic ass, then empty a clip into her to finish the job. I gave this story a chance through 3 chapters, but the direction this is going just isn't for me. I'm done!
Mostly, I'm enjoying the story so far. It has considerable potential and I shall continue to read it. Too early to decide if I'm going to read all the chapters, let's see where it goes next.
Should have made the years prior first for backstory rather then jumping back and forth confusing the hell out of the reader.
Long blond hair oh I love this story of yours!!!!
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This is a 10+....
This has a good plot.
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