All Comments on 'A Small Revenge'

was awesome can't wait for the party, any four women to include my sisters that would torture me for the night would be complete heaven on earth. keep up the good work

total crap no guy would put up with the teasing once he got free he would have spanked all the girls and then tossed them out and told his sister he never wanted to see her again and he would miss the party and when the mom called to find out why he would tell her to ask his sister keep it atleast somewhat realistic

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okay story, but just that, okay. Pay more attention to the characters motives for acting, not just the characters doing the action, but those being acted upon as well.

to the last commentor. There is no internet law--or did you mean the communications act. Even then, your comments are not protected by any of it or by copywrite laws. Try some other form of threat, this one doesn't work.

INTERNET COPYRIGHT LAW PROTECTS EVERY THING POSTED ON THE WEB NO MATTER WHAT IT IS this story still sucks

i liked it.....and internet copyright law some one tried using that on me it just an empty threat

should have put this in the NONEROTIC AREA big turn off if this is the best you can do stop writing

At least to the second one,he or she is being a big jerk,I liked this story and think you should keep it going! I hope to see more of this story!

I'm not the best at mathematics, the line about the 6 of them fit in the shower... thought the story was a brother, sister and her 3 friends?

The general story line i liked...but no one can cum that many times in that short of time...didn't finish reading it after the 4th or 5th organism....but i will still look for your stories and hopefully your characters will take a little more time.

This was a great story. No idea why no one wanted to comment down on this. Did you already make the party one?

HOWEVER THERE WERE A HELL OF A LOT OF MISTAKES. THE SPELLING MISTAKES ARE BLOODY ANNOYING, AS THEY RUIN THE FLOW OF THE STORY, SUCH AS SHOWING AND SHOW RESPECTIVELY INSTEAD OF SHOVING AND SHOVE SEAMEN INSTEAD OF SEMEN, ALSO LEAVING OUT WORDS WHERE THEY WERE NEEDED AND ADDING WORDS WHERE THEY NOT ONLY DON'T BELONG BUT DESTROY THE SENSE AND CONSTRUCTION OF THE SENTENCES INVOLVED. BUT I WOULD STILL LIKE TO SEE A SECOND PART TO THIS STORY WHERE ITS JUST HIM AND HIS SISTER, WHERE THEIR LOVE DEEPENS.