All Comments on 'A Snapshot for my Album'

...there was a little confusion, with me at least, over who was speaking since the dialogue order became confusing. At one point I felt that maybe the characters were talking in the third person (referring to themselves as though they were actually an additional person in the scene), since that was what made sense at that point.

Otherwise the story worked well. I was worried about the presence of the man, but he was handled well and added to the story by being someone in the background, rather than a threat to the flow. Please do not imagine that we need a follow up ti this story with these characters: do not guild the lily, try for something different instead.