by soul71
I love your stories and this one is as good as the others. I do have two issues though, the chapter's are posted way to far apart. Please submit the future chapters closer together if at all possible. When you post four to eight months apart it is difficult to remember what is happening in the story between posts. The only other thing that I see is grammar errors. I have not seen any spelling errors so whatever spell check you are using is catching spelling errors. Here is an example of what I mean by grammar errors. When you use they're or you're you don't need to add are because it is already implied. In the example the are is not needed as they're = they are and you're = you are. If you need an editor, I would be happy to help as like I said I do love your stories.
Thank you for posting the next installment! I’ve been hoping to see it since I finished the first 5 chapters when I discovered your stories! Great as always! Keep up the good work!
I think that Mary should be the mistress of the family , they marry and she has his children
I'm not really in bdsm or sm shit but DAMN I love this story. Cant wait for the next chapter
I agree with dark1973knight, never been into bdsm. When I started reading this story it drew me in like the rest of your stories.
I don't think Mary would be the mistress of the house because she was broken by Mara, but Jason may pick her over the others. Mary could pull Beverley into the mix.
I'm going to be waiting like everyone else. I'm hooked!
That you are not using an editor?
Because if you are,you need to fire him/her/them
It really breaks the flow of the story when one comes across the glaring errors
It is great to find a piece that is a pleasure to read. I hope this story will go on soon.
Please learn the difference between the word 'expect' vs 'except'.