All Comments on 'A Son's Temptation'

It started off well, but then rushed off to the ending. Very disappointing.

The grammatical errors make this very difficult to read. Your paragraphs are smushed together. It's not very good to have more than two people talking in the same paragraph, and certainly not conversations within the same paragraph. Also, standard rookie mistakes like giving out stats in the opening paragraph.

part 2

Danielle sounds extra sexy and needed more intimate encounters with her son. They can experience their love, and bodies, in so many different ways. I'd be nailing her every chance I got!