All Comments on 'A Soul to Rescue Ch. 02: Waiting'

Simply too short a snapshot of a story to let us get involved enough to enjoy.

This chapter was okay. I'm glad the Devon is safe, but she has a VERY long road of recovery ahead of her. I still want to know how Jake figured out where Devon was being held.

instead of a bang it was a Fissile

what a shame it was a really good story

I would strongly recommend having at least one full page before submitting the next chapter, these 2 have seemed more like two paragraph outlines.

Oh And,

SLOW DOWN!

This is NOT aimed specifically at you, but far too many potentially good stories are rushed without fleshing things out. I strongly suspect that MTV is finally invading literature in print, either that or it so did a long time ago and I just noticed it recently.

In no way was my review meant to hurt at all, i tend to speak bluntly.

People looking for stroke stories won't like longer works, some of us like to be drawn in and have a bit of a ride. I could get caught up with this one.

Good Luck on the other endeavor you mentioned.

still a good story

Hoping for more...

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