All Comments on 'A Squire for a Knight'

Wonderful job babe. Glad you posted it.

Shadow*

I liked the story line. The writing is good. You should work on your spelling errors, grammar and punctuation, though. A word program with a spell checker might prove helpful. All in all, good job. ^.^

No doubt this was written by a woman...

Short, but well written story.

Would love to see more of Collin & Sir Luke

Tally Ho!!!

That was terribly sweet :) The dagger bit got me good.

Lovely, I do wish you'd write more stories.

Wonderful : ) thank you!

wish you had made it longer. i only cringed when you had the night take him with no prep. i think it would have hurt the boy terribly. I think you could have continued their story.

you sould make this into a chapter story

You absolutely NEED to re-write the story. Start it slow, explain what is happening around them, how they know each other,develop characters, form a relationship, then have Collin jump into bed with Luke and have them feel a bit guilty about it, keep it purely physical, then get them to gradually fall in love, AND THEN, they pronounce they're everlasting love for each other...

That's how you write a fairy-tale. Not this thing you have. SO, I'll re-write it for you and you can have your name on it OR you can keep it like this ad no one will read it.