All Comments on 'A Stick of Butter'

What the fuck did i just read? Gotta stop jerking off in the mornong. Its messing with my intelligence...

The flow of this story was all over the place and the naration was poor. I couldn't visualize the characters and the pacing was too fast. If you wanna make people feel like they are connecting with your story, then you need to slow down and pay more attention to detail. Also, it seems unlikely that Mr. Whitney, who was cast as a man who beats his wife, would suddenly embrace living with our hero.

I am off to jerk to something with more substance.

Yes, scathing, but just the kind of feedback I need to improve, thanks Anonymous. I reread the story and got exactly what you pointed out. Shit. I shanked this one pretty good. Oh, well, on the next one.:)

Don't know why the other guy had such a hate on, I thought it was an enjoyable, well written short story.

I enjoyed your story,certainly left me aroused.