All Comments on 'A Story About Friends'

... it was so obvious that you'd not wasted any time in proof reading!!

" to his upper body in the mirror he though, "thank you, football!" All the hours in the weight room as a younger man still had a lasting effect. After removing his shoes and socks, he took ahold of his waste band."

'though' should have been 'thought'!

'waste band' should have been 'waist band'

And that is just part of just one paragraph!!

Sorry, I did my best. Hopefully you can make it through my first story and enjoy. If you can't, I understand. Thanks for giving it a shot, though.

I enjoyed tbis story would live for you to finish it. . Please it was going so well I wiuld love to read more!!!!!!