All Comments on 'A Strange Occurrence Ch. 01'

There are alot of grammatical mistakes in this story. Please edit before posting part 2. Idea is interesting with several ways it could go.

Shame on your English teachers.

heeheheheheheheheh you're such a fool!

Should this not be in the Mature section? I read the whole thing and no where did I read any incest/taboo.

Definitely a turn-on but needs work. "your'r'nt"? Holy cow, batman, that's bad.

For the record, there's no such thing as pre-cum. It's all cum and just as potent as later ejaculations. A preliminary dribble perhaps, but we're not talking basketball.

While the story does need editing, if you've ever spent any time in the deep South, honey, you may have heard the word "your'r'nt." Just say in ' , and I guess you'll call me out on that one as well since "say in'" is not a word either. As for precum, yes it does exist and can taste very good as well. Some call it pre-ejaculate, but get a man aroused and it'll be there. Try watching an "edging" video and you'll see the difference between pre-ejaculate and semen. Any of us who love giving oral sex know the difference. And while one may get pregnant from pre-ejaculate, not all is as potent as semen. Try Google, it can be your friend. Monica

Thank you all, for you words so far. I'll be sure to read over the story more, and edit my work a bit before turning it in. I'll try and reach out to an editor. I have much more, but it is very much unedited. As far as precum that is really just to indicate pre-orgasm semen. You'ren't was the intention (though not what I put ><), and it was to show the south. As I did spend quite some time in Texas where double contractions exist a lot regardless of whether or not they are grammatically correct. All in all my 2nd story, so I'm still learning! Thank you all for your words of wisdom. Even if it is hate! I can get something out of hate.