by emajinerie
... excellent. The descriptions are very good, there are a few open plot lines that could take the story in a few directions, several good small details, in addition to the unmistakable erotic quality of the story. I was at a loss as to what the main character was wearing for lack of a baseline description though... Good work and keep it up.
For a first submission a very interesting work. It's hooked me enough to be impatient for part 2.
I hope it's in the pipeline.
Live well
Hal
Great read, just please don't make her evil.
At least not too evil :)
Thanks
Looked good to me, and I appreciated that the work had been proofread and brought up to standards.
Sexy story, ripe with opportunities! Mmmm...
a very definite winner. You write very well and create very visual erotic imagery. That's worth a ten in my book. Great job.
So many avenues to explore, so little time.
Keep up the GREAT WORK
I am eager to read the next section of the story. This has a lot of possibilities and I am sure you will go wonderful places with this. *grins*
This is a wonderful start to I hope a long and erotic story. By all means keep going with it as we wait impatiently for the rest of the story.
Great awakening story, I especially liked that she was being constantly surprised by what she was thinking. The fact that she originally thought she had a subnormal libido was a nice touch also. Lots of little interest points, I liked it.
AWESOME!
Please come out with a sequel very soon. One of the best I've read.
AWESOME!
Please come out with a sequel very soon. One of the best I've read.
Reminds me of that dream where you realize your naked in class... but way better :)
I had a lot of fun reading this, I like how her body seems to be controlling her with its own lust. Go ahead and write the next chapter or two, I can't wait to read them!
Ha! HA! From innocent schoolgirl, to ultimate self pleasurer to slut! Loved it! That teacher is definately going to notice the change and seduce her ;) Got to laugh at her, because she's so modest and she's acting so unlike herself and her embarssment brings me the giggles! Hilariously sexy! Hell yeah! From a virgin school girl like just like her... Maybe I'm the one opening the door ;)
my cock is throbbing now, pre-cum flowing, I'm ready to cum after reading this...