All Comments on 'A Summer Party'

My, God, you have no fucking idea what a sentence is - run on after run on after run on! Your ideas are sexy, but you very much need an editor! I rated your story three stars to encourage you to keep writing; but, if you don't get an editor, you are looking at one star. In fact, you'd get no stars if that rating were available! Do us all a favor and get an editor! PLEASE!

I definitely like your plot! It was quick paced with a lot of action, something many short story writers struggle with. Keep writing and your work will continue to improve! I wonder what will happen tomorrow in the story!

5Star + from me. Great story!! One I can totally relate to. Hot Tub and sharing my wife. Nothing turns me on more.