All Comments on 'A Summer Without End'

Filled with emotions, conflict, tension, romance, discovery, remorse, and fun.

Nicely done.

Pleasant story, even if it was a bit long and predictable. The only "Jack Sparrow" I know is the character in "Pirates of the Caribbean"

It deserves a 10!

I really am hoping you will stretch this one out into a series. So many possibilities!

A somewhat longer story would have been nice but just the same I enjoyed it immensely.

Thank You

It is a great story. But the guy was in the army for 6 years and never got laid?!?!? I don't think so...

One of the best stories I've read on this site. I hope you write more about Reid and Evelyn and the triplets!

You Sir,are a master.Another great well crafted story from you as I have learned to expect from you.Always wonderful reading.I hope you post more in the future.Very many thanks for your excellent efforts.

Such an easy 5 to assess.

I loved how you wove Reid's story into this, and how you then turned him to writing. It then became quite the treat to see Evelyn's triplets so attach themselves to him and later, Evelyn as well. You gripped us with something so painful as Reid's father tossing him aside, unjustly blaming him for his wife's unfortunate accident. You then gave Dane and Stephanie their comeuppance with their parents, with Reid having a happy ending. However, I do hope this will become a longer-arced story because I'd hate to see it end here. Don't know where you'd take it aside from having Reid go to Perth, BUT it seems like at least one of triplets is also sweet on him too (I remember one of them wanting Reid to massage lotion onto her). Could prove for an interesting dynamic and I hope you truly make this a multiple-chapter story.

could have been longer, but you sir did an excellent job!

will there be another episode?

I hope that isn't an end to a summer without end, he hasn't even read the rest of his book to the girls, you can't leave us hanging like that

I hope it has long legs like the Ben Shepherd sagas, or the Ed Walters story

Thank you

I couldn't make it to the end of the first page. Your writing skills are good though

Great story hope you continue to add more

I get the fact that this is supposed to be short story and it does have a beginning middle and end..But....It feels unfinished. I think we're just spoilt from your multiple page sagas so this short story felt...short, Looking forward to reading more from you, i check your wall at least twice a week to see if there is anything new and i was delighted to find this so in behalf of all of us bookworms who enjoy your writing i say thank you and i..we..look forward to more.

Malcolm (Tazzy)

As someone has already said - please can we have some more

You are one of my favorite authors. I have read the Ben Shepherd sagas many times. I hope you will continue this one also.

To say this is a great story is a major understatement. Please continue it !!!

Really enjoyed that story.

Great build up of characters and backgrounds with some nice twist and turns.

But towards the end it got a little strange. The Talbot kids reaction to their wrongdoings was to much.

And the sudden plans on emigration seems a bit rushed. Like you just wanted it to still be short, not that 5 lit-pages is short in any way. The story, both you writing it and us reading it, deserved something better imho. And that he was a virgin was going to far.

Nice to see that a lot of sex isnt needed in a well told story. The eroticism was there anyway. Glad you kept his hands of the triplets as well.

Looking forward to your other stories.

Great story and writting. Has great potential as a possible series; please continue.

The story was enjoyable. Like Space Mountain, it was a great ride, but ended so soon. Here's hoping we hear from Reid and the 'E' girls.

but comfortable. thanks for sharing...

Everyone was clumsy: how they talked, how they behaved - just wierd people. You'll have to explain to me how two very nice, pleasant, caring people raised children who could be that nasty to Reid - without them even knowing it. Nice people usually raise nice children or at least know when their kids are misbehaving.

The witness protection ploy sounded absolutely rediculous and wasn't worth inventing. And the 35 year old virgin story for a guy who was 6'4" and 200 lb and was "ruggedly handsome" is also rediculous. Literotica is made up of fantasy and has plots that we'd all like to be part of (usually), but we should have gotten better than this with the basic story that was not too bad. 2*

As always you leave us wanting more. I want to thank you for your craft and whit.

What a terrible piece of writing. Snore fest. Zzzzzzzzzzzzzz

I am truly sorry for the ignorance of a few who have so obviously never ever written a story. It is to bad these ( trying to think of a nice word to describe their attitude ) idiots did not recognize the story of a shy, nervous, awkward young man who lacked confidence in himself until he met Evelyn. I enjoyed it very much. I do hope you continue this story on much longer.

Semper fi

Works both ways.

The Way you brought out your Character. He took his "old" Bullie and slammed him to the wall and let him know "No More" . it would have been nice if the Bully's wife gave a little to the Bullied.

You never disappoint. I haven't read all your work posted here only because I want to save some for later. Thank you for sharing with us.

Beautifully written, Good Character building Looking forward to more

I hope this is not the end of this story as there areplenty of plot lines that could be explored.

Excellent writing with some intriguing opportunities with story line options.

BRAVO!!

Beautiful tale. Ending was a bit abrupt, entertaining nonetheless.

Wonderful story, absolutely wonderful...

Blooming lovely !!

I had just finished the entire "Shepherd" series and see a lot of similar potential with this beginning. Very much did not want the story to end, and I hope more chapters are in the works. Thank you for a very enjoyable read!

I have to agree with BAnde. The ending was a bit abrupt. I am not sure why you needed the drama about the witness protection at all. They could have just been the summer neighbors. I am guessing that you had bigger plans that you cancelled for some reason.

Except for one little nit-picky thing. Her and her kids were “squatting” on his property. And when he asked why, she put him off, refused to answer. I would have been on the phone within 5 minutes asking how to get an eviction notice served. Pretty people or not, my property is MY property, and nobody is going to just move in on it. At least and especially without a damn good reason. Other than that, I enjoyed the story.

Comment title says it all.

What could be better than a beach house with such great neighbors? It might be fantasy, but I'd take it over real life any day!

Great writing AGAIN. I'm not sure why I waited so long to read this one but I'm sure glad I finally did, it was a great one.

Really need to expand this one a bit, alot was left untold like what happens next with the mean children, the triplets and boyfriends and those that hunted her husband. There real.y is alot that could be expanded on from this story, very good start.

Needs to be completed,

It was a really nice old time romance. Thanks.

He's just too pathetic in many ways. Acts more like a little boy than a grown man. Honestly I was starting to wonder whether he was retarded. Makes me think the author is a woman who doesn't understand men all that well.

And crying over his writing makes him seem like such a girl, not to mention it showing a very skewed view of the craft of writing.

Well written, interesting. The main character seems exceptionally backward for his age. In spite of some character weakness, a very good and rewarding story.

I have known a number of Americans very well over the years. I know that every one of them would have been demanding rent from the Sparrows as soon has they knew that their house was on his property! They would have immediately contacted a lawyer and legally established their ownership of the land! In some US states squatter rights are legal if you don’t take immediate action upon discovery.

I enjoyed reading it very much. The characters were just fine and who really cares if it was wrote by a man or a woman . Don't let all the negative comments get you down I for one thought it was a great story.

I really liked BurntRedstone's "Trail of Promise" and "Drive." Those were well-written and had believable (relatively) storylines. I did not comment on them, because other commentators had already said everything that needed to be said. But I gave each a 5*.

I then started the Shepard line of stories, but they did not really catch me. So I tried this story, and it left me totally flat. There is poignancy, and just an utterly unrealistic and unbelievable situation rthat develops as expected without any surprises or real development.

wait what was that about "Jack Sparrow"?

I didn't get that point. Why and how Witness Protection?

what happened

what's (was) going on?

other than that very nice little story.

I think the Jack Sparrow bit was conceived as a humorous explanation for what made the story possible

Maybe a little rushed at the end with some things left unsettled or unanswered but plenty of scope to develop another story if desired. The start and the build up through the middle to the end are typical and very enjoyable. As usual a well turned out story well worth 5 stars again.

I didn’t give stars out of respect for the author. This however is no where near the caliber of his other works I have read.

Don’t worry. He just ran out of his psych meds. Once he’s back on them he’ll start giving out his usual 3* ratings again. Occasionally 4*, rarely 5*.

I’ll give you 5* to balance out his lower score.

What! That's the end?

Delete the first comment. This was clearly an unfinished story that the author didn't want to complete. I loathe that behavior. You lost respect from me. Ending a story during rising action. You should be ashamed

Really enjoyed this story. Very real seeming, with characters I'd like to know as friends, or have as my own family, at a believable pace.

Thanks for your story. It is well written and believable!

Five Stars

Nice but too short

ok...

I liked it.

You have to read all of his stories! They get better and better!

I really did forget how good this story was.

Damn you’re a wonderful writer.

Such a wonderful story! Thank-you I thoroughly enjoyed reading it!

Great story. Would like a chapter 2.

Fantastic story!

⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐

Dam I agree would be nice for more of this story.

Very nice, romantic

Another sweet, wonderful story. To always live in summer....if only

Beautifully set up and concluded. I would love another instalment.

What a ridiculous notion. Never a real explanation as to how the MC's property was stolen for a house by the sparrows. Never an attempt to assert himself against an overbearing and uncaring woman. Shouldn't even an antihero have some vaguely redeeming features?

Reid is a stupid cunt surrounded by the Sparrow WHORES

Of course the Sparows were fucking his father!! WHAT A STUPID WHORISH STORY

Nice one, excellent work....

Another excellent story! Thank you. Love your stories! Another 5 BIG FAT FLUFFY STARS!

Would love more of this story, characters are great and this is definitely a 5* tale.

Brilliant!

I feel this wonderful story has just begun. Hope you have additional chapters to tie up the loose ends.

⭐⭐⭐⭐1/2

Again outstanding story telling, feels like you have elements to continue this story a little more.

Great story as always but need more please

Super enjoyable story. I wanted more and more and more. However I am happy to have enjoyed this story whatever the length. I could feel the pain and the joy as all the emotions flowed. Thanks for sharing. John

Fantastic story...thank you!!!

Wonderful story, so self-sufficient going along the full arc.

I first came to Literotica looking for short Romantic stories.

I have found many great ones and here BurntRedstone has give us another. So satisfying.

The Hoary Cleric, a guest at Literotica.

As others have said, it would nice to hear more of this wonderful story. I especially would have liked to see him finish reading his story to the girls and Evelyn.

A definite 5*!

Childhood ...... It shood be the best part of a lifetime, carefree love happiness playtime just name it for you, but we have neighborhood or parenting disasters or school pressure just endless happenings ...... So this tale kicked the right butts and spread love to the right ones

💝💝💝💝💝💝💝💝💝💝🍀

The story barely started to heat up then it's over. What? This is a very rushed ending. Lots of potential, but I feel kinda cheated.

Definitely a great story! Could also do with another chapter or 4! Awesome job as always!

Sad to see the story end and the at the real beginning.

All old hat now I guess, but for the record , I thought it was too short, hilariously unbelievable and lacked any real kind of story arc, barring screwing the hot milf.. Moreover it treats us the readers as if we’re credulous fools, with a free house with free utilities, estranged parents that still leave the perceived offender everything, a family made up of hot available females that are still in a witness protection program and childhood bullies getting taught life lessons, whilst the parents and restaurant owner stands by and does nothing. Truly not your finest work BurntRedstone.

Enjoyed the story except he should have required the young lady to delete the naked pics of him! That was not very appropriate actions for someone to do when first meeting a neighbor.

Good story, though the ending was abbreviated.

A whore and her daughters with a stupid wimpy MC

Not your best work, but I enjoyed the Sparrows. How did the arrangements get made for them to live on the property?

An enjoyable re-read.

O enjoyed the story but feel there is more to come. What happened about his book? Where did his screwing the mild lead? Did the grewsom twosom wreak revenge on him for standing up to them? When is the rest of the story going to be told?

4th read and still a great story! Still feels that this story isn't finished yet; his bookwriting, the terrible 2, his militairy past, the girls, his past with his parents (maybe finding something of his dad, like a dairy)

Damn. What a great story. Characters were good, story flowed well, plot was good. I enjoyed the hell out of this. 5 stars from me. Thanks for sharing

Weak wimpy Reid and the three bitches