All Comments on 'A Surprise Scottish Incest Ch. 02'
by rhimshot415
- 7 Comments
Anonymousover 8 years agoYour dialogue is worse than a Mills & Boone penny dreadful, NO-ONE speaks like that, do you? I think not, and if that's how you think English and Scottish people articulate, then I suggest you stop looking at Bond-villain stereotypes and actually do some research. Last time out, you didn't even take 30 seconds to look up Scotland on Google, otherwise you'd know there are no counties there, and no such thing as a 'lochlomonder' - that alone put this story at the top of the shit-list, and then your terrible, stilted dialogue? Laughably bad, but you get one star just so you know how terrible this story and your writing are; delete the comment if you like, the star still remains
rhimshot415over 8 years agoAuthorThis comment is addressed to the Anonymous moron who has criticized both Chapters published so far. Anything I write is FICTION. Unless I specify otherwise, that implies a willing suspension of disbelief on the part of the reader. Short of committing self-inflicted violence, please pass on Ch. 03, when it is posted, as well as any future stories that I may elect to submit. I neither want nor need you as a reader. And for the record, all my stories are presumed to take place in the U.S. I only attributed Scottish ANCESTRY to Kandace and to Rudolph. If that offends you, then perhaps I could recommend either the self-inflicted violence, or not reading any more of my stories.
Mavramornover 8 years agoI agree; your dialog is fucking terrible, your story-telling skills even worse, 1 star
mcbtwsover 8 years agoI'm from the west coast of Scotland and the Scottish references in this story are just ludicrous. Waste of my time reading it. 1*.
Scotsman69over 8 years agoof this knows zilch about Scotland...
And to make matters worse it's a crap story.
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