All Comments on 'A Swim to Remember'

Couldn't get past the poor grammar and spelling. Your story could have been hot and enjoyable. Simply offering constructive criticism, not bashing your story.

"Shove that red hot poker in my bung hole"?!?

Who talks like that? That line really blew the story for me.

i liked your story i thout i was strait but now i am not sure it made me so hot that i wanted to be fucked in the ass an suck his cock while sucked mine

there were some spelling and grammar mistakes and really i just didn't like your diction or syntax... this story was disappointing.

ok

Very hot. Thanks for the orgasm ;)