by VetusNoctua
Well I must say I enjoyed this story very much and hope you continue with it. ✌
High marks indeed for your first time! My personal observation is that the main character's dialogue is a bit clinical and verbose, but that's only my opinion, so feel free to ignore me. :) I sent you a PM if you care to respond.
I very much enjoyed your story. My only question would be why would a sexually active young woman in this day and age not be on birth control? The rhythm method she practices is noted for frequent failures. I do hope there will be more to this story. Are you going to make us wait 3 weeks for Terri's response?
.......I found it got a little boring towards the end. It seemed to me to be getting too verbose for much progress. It's probably me. Maybe I didn't un derstand it well enough. Look forward to c.10.
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The title says it all! Thanks for your time and imagination with this story. I look forward to more chapters. 5*