by bmunchausen
Immensely enjoyable, well written and keeps the reader's attention. Well done.
While not "erotica" I'd like to read more about how the "Water Rats" get on.
Excellent work. Keep it up and give us more .... SOON!
The whole story is great and I can't wait to see how you develop it more. Great start.
You are most articulate and an excellent writer -- the story is very exciting where it should be exciting, etc. Two quibbles: 1) why an aversion to "cock"? I get tired of reading only of your dick -- several times in the same paragraph. It's okay, but tiresome. Cock can be overused, of course, but it is a great erotic, descriptive word. 2) It is "sloe gin" not "slow: (has nothing to do with speed).
Be that as it may, I will read the rest of the story with great interest.
A great read. Lovely and sweet. Looking forward to the next instalment. xx