All Comments on 'A Thousand Words Pt. 01'

There is a sentence at the end "...go check on HIS husband". It should be 'HER' husband. Please do not judge the story too harshly for it :)

I think there is one more small error in the paragraph that begins 'No no my dear'. You wrote 'it was clear that he was clutching someone's head between her thighs.' While this isn't anatomically impossible, it wasn't clear to me. I believe SHE was doing the clutching.

In any case, I forgive both your transgressions. Pronouns can be such ornery little things sometimes. Otherwise, my compliments to your writing. You have an almost too good grasp of English. I find the lilting sing-song accent of Indian women to be enchanting but I appreciate that it might be a little difficult to express in writing.

I'm glad to see more women writers on this site and I encourage you to continue. I'm looking forward to Pt. 2.

P. S. Would it be asking too much to see a picture of you wearing a sari in your bio?

me thinks trouble in paradise is a-brewing, TK U MLJ LV NV

Nice build up for a powerful and emotional story of sexual treats

Again awesome narration & beautiful play of words..

A sequel or a continuation is a must to know weather Reah gets a Photo shoot with a genuine expression...

Good starter for a really great story. It's too short but very interesting, and grabs my attention

Extremely well-worded and written with such obvious skill - a wonderful introduction to what I hope will be a lengthy series