All Comments on 'A Treat on Halloween'

"Once Marie's parents walked in, Dan said his short hellos and goodbyes and the two headed out. Dan drove them to Marie's thinking about the fun that the two missed out on back at Marie's. They laughed as they pulled out of the driveway. "

He's driving them to her place, thinking about what they just missed out on at her place??

Also, do you HAVE to use her actual name at virtually every opportunity? Try some alternative now and again.

Not the best and not the worst story I've read on here so don't be disheartened. You need an editor to proof read and make suggestions. A few errors here and there. Keep the imagination going.