All Comments on 'A Typical Ending'

And more of your offerings are desperately needed here. Please?

Glad you are back to writing! There's a handful of writers I enjoy reading - you being near the top!

I particularly enjoyed your story "An Unexpected Reaction" Rates at the top of my list of favorite stories.

Thanks for using your talent and entertaining us!

burninglove

cheating, fucked up, guy, got divorced. How wonderfully UNIQUE!..

Sorry, nothing here. Boring.

So sweet.

flash tale, all said.

Well done and concise.

For a shorty story this was really good.

So lean, so short, so fully packed. 5 stars

I hope this story isn't autobiographical.

Very good.

he should have brought the propane back, continued grilling and apologize to his hosts while flipping burgers and hotdogs like it was nothing because he just didn't give a damn anymore. I still liked it and I usually don't care for flash stories unless they are funny. Sorry, I didn't know you had left but I'm glad you're back. Where did you go?

not your usual effort...not bad mind you...just more of a snack than the feast you often serve up

I think it is too short. Needs more. Pretty shitty all in all.

It is a good story. Just not long enough.

Like, who keeps a propane tank in the basement? Conflagration city, man!

Even for a flash story. Needed a bit more.

good start but too short

You know what's funny? There are a couple of comments here longer than the story itself. Just think, with the wife's jaw opened like that she could suck an elephant dick.

ha

while you are busy making other plans........

For a while I thought you were going to have him miss and kick her in the jaw.

With commensurate damage. ^_^

I loved the unexpected deep throat. Hilarious.

Stabbing his hand. I thought it would be quivering in his ass.

WTF!

@frontlinecaster 06/24/15 - I realize this is an old comment BUT: He refers to those "who make up this section's core demographic these days." Well if they make up the "core demographic," SHOULDN'T the stories be geared toward them? It's like a baseball fan complaining that football appeals to football fans, instead of changing to appeal more to baseball fans! And who is he to call for it to be "put out of its misery?"

Left his wife when she just learned how to deep throat..

You are never supposed to store propane tanks indoors. If it leaks, propane is heavier than air, and fills the house from the bottom, up... until it reaches an ignition source.

This is about the fourth time I'm going through all your stories - and they're still great!

Can't burn a bitch without propane. Totally not a how to guide. And nice discovery. Dude, you're married to a cheater.

...5 stars. Thanx!

Loklie

It said everything that needed to be said. Perfect.

Qhml1 always spins a great story. This is no exception.

Did he get the propane tank and finish the BBQ? That was his duty! A real man finishes the grilling before going home.

Perfect flash story. Excellent way to stick a fork in it.

...about life going on....

you love it when a master puts out a great story!

Your protagonist shouted "Fork you!" without saying a single word.

Five stars, of course.

Did she get screwed in divorce?

Did lover get taken to cleaners?

Little more info

Yes sir, that's what I'm talking about.

Thank you Q.

that's why this 'generic' story is so good.

it's more grounded in reality. one spouse cheats, and when they get away with it the first time, continue to cheat. every cheater is making a decision to look down on their partner, and abuse their relationship...poison it even.

and a poisoned relationship will wither away. unlike many of the fantasy stories about, "we had so many good years though/ so hot/ such a good fuck/ can't imagine my life without them" the reality is every negative word, every missed chance to make their relationship better/stronger, and every emotional/physical betrayal adds one more drop of poison. and it doesn't take much poison until the cheated party becomes physically ill. it takes every few ill episodes to push that person completely out of love with the cheater.

but it always catches the cheater off-guard. oddly enough. they really believe their own hype after a while. they can't imagine going from loved and respected to villain overnight. it wasn't overnight, but that's how fast it hits them.

Well said.

I liked it

Short and sweet

Needs a part 2 follow up.

Nice, quick, succinct, and tells the story. Good read.

its a bit short for me, but still 5* for the entertainment and writing skill

Not at all, though the latter half of the story is weak. It is not likely that he could totally ignore her, or totally not feel anything when he sees her in the street.

And, why could they not move away? I don't understand that.

Life is full of choices.

Well done story, though I would wonder at the consequences of the assault, provoked though it is. This is never a consideration in these BTB stories.

Oh yes, you can and you can't.

You can totally ignore the cheating cunt. He knew it was going on and had already reached the point of her being less than nothing. She didn't deserve any compassion or concern for her feelings. She gave that up when she placed herself in that position. In short to him she didn't exist. No kids, no interaction needed in the future. Wah lah She didn't exist.

As for not being able to leave, Maybe he had a really good job he didn't want to lose And there was no offices in other areas to transfer too. You mean he should he quit what he has spent years succeeding at and take the risk of starting over somewhere else over a useless Cunt. Naw, she wasn't worth it. As for what her reasons for staying in the area are "Who fucking cares" She's a cunt and everyone knows it and if she stays and lives with the reputation great. At least she decided to join the other sluts in the area instead of moving elsewhere and spreading her uselessness.

Great cheater story, but a little short. 4 stars

Oh that was a good one, short sharp and precise,

I cannot believe this is the same guy who did the rewrite of Daniel Q. Steele's "Separate Vacations." Of course in that case he had the basic storyline laid out for him.

This story, in contrast, is a microcosm of the crap he usually writes. He so much as says so. Two stars, because it's mostly empty and worthless.

My brother said the same thing about reaching the point of "not giving a fuck anymore". You hit on all the major subplots that a neighborhood backyard bbq contains. And always remember the words of Dr. Hook, "You better watch your friends...you better look out".

He stuck with it until he caught her, then kicked her out. Great story.

A little violence helps to sooth the nerves once awhile.

@Meridethx this is a great short story. You don't like, that's fine. But until you write your own stories no one cares. You're either working from home (federal emplyee?) or unemployed. Either way you are no sage. In case you haven't figured it out, he doesn't write cuck shit so I guess you're out of luck. Take your CCP tactics somewhere else coz we don't care.

The Cheaters Should Be Grateful

That it was just a friendly BBQ and not a softball game. I have it on good authority that either a wooden (my preference being of a certain age) or aluminum bat can and will cause an infinite more amount of damage. Signed: BTW

A skeleton structure for a story that deserves to be fleshed out. If it were complete I might have scored it higher.

A great short story, worth all 5 stars! Thank you Q

somewhere east of Omaha

An Instructional Tale

Don't be stupid. Read and learn. Don't be a dick. Or a dickette.

Five Stars

Pretty average for you. You must have banged this out in an idle afternoon. Still all the elements are there.

Good outline for a story.

O hell yes! 5*

Hell ya. Finally a great one.

Absolutely! Why do women who cheat, think the husband has to listen to their “ confession”. Tell it to the priest, bitch!

5 stars

Hahaha kicking him in the balls while she's sucking, has got to be the best image when you know they are lost causes. She haha hard, and screams bloody murder hahaha.

Again, A great short story.

short but intense.

5 *. thank you for this.

Another good one! You are so very creative. Ideas just seem to flow out of every pore! Keep composing!

Too short. Need to flesh it out a lot.

Thanks for coming back and thanks for sharing this story.

Real life sucks. Shame to lose a good grilling utensil like that.

The last short story of yours was much better.

Bill S.

It rings of the truth.

Short, sweet, and to the point. 5 stars.

The one thing I think woman don’t understand about men is, of course the physical cheating is always going to be hard for him to overcome. But the real killer, is the loss of trust. Look at it this way. Most men are not out there looking for a woman, who us going to work herself to death for 40 years, to support him and the family. That is the man’s job. Men have limited resources they accumulate in their lifetime. To know a woman does not have your back, and may be planning to leave you, rules out reconciliation. The other thing woman miss, is how they treated, and mentally abused their husband during the affair. Men are not stupid. They realize whatever made you do this the first time, will probably come up again. So, look at it this way. If you bought a car brand, and had nothing but issues with it, regardless of how it looks, your never gonna buy that brand again. When a woman cheats, lies to him and humiliates him, hubby realizes the Toyota he thought he was married to, is actually a Nissan. Time to dump her, before she ruins him!

Artie88-

You are wrong about not being able to see her, and have it affect you. I always lived by a couple rules when it came to dating. One was, if you accepted my date, we went through a short period of getting to know each other. After 3 times, if I liked you, I would talk about being exclusive. I know that sounds stupid today, but back in the 70’s and early 80’s, it was not. I was very much invested in my career at the time, and did not want to waste my resources on a woman, who had me competing with other men, for her attention. If she couldn’t commit, we parted friends. After we started dating, my biggest concern was, did she have my back? If the answer was no, I ended the relationship. If we ended on bad terms, I never thought about what could have been. I did run into an ex bar tending one time, who cheated on me ( I dumped her)and it was an awkward situation, and I had one beer and left. The bottom line is this- there are many women out there, who will make a perfect partner to go through life with. Stop wasting your time, trying to impress Narcissist 10’s. Date normal women, until you find one, that isn’t perfect , but is perfectly in love with you. I did, and I have been happily married, for 37 years!

I loved the revenge!

5*

BJ

Amusing little tale! Punches well above it's own weight. Short but sharp, straight to the point, BBQ "Oven-Ready" with all the excess fat seamlessly trimmed off! Simmer over hot charcoal for three minutes..

R.S.

Yeah, pretty simple solution but it ain't easy.....................

No dialogue with minimal angst. Three stars ⭐️ for this one.

Fork that fucker!!!

Hell yeah.

Good concept I guess but i believe it could have been expanded. Still deserved 5 stars

I loved it. I felt the cheaters got everything that came to them. Felt it was a little short and a quick read, and it could be expanded upon. I still loved it, and gave it 5 stars.

Artie88 got it 100% correct. Find someone you're compatible with. She doesn't have to be a 10, but after a few years she'll be a 10 in your eyes, and that will be all that counts. Note this is coming from someone who has been married for 42+ years, and we're partners in most everything we do. Yes, we've even had 2 kids together, and they're 42 and 39.

Some got it right but others missed the openig when it stated it is a short story, straight to the point with no needed explanation GOOD for the slut

AA+

Forked in a jamb??? LOLOLOL!

Reread this, just as good as the first time, so true so real for many

I read it again. It's terse and I'm not supposed to like it, but I do! The terse nature propels the story with a sense of urgency. Darn, that was good! Thanks for sharing.

Short, sweet and to the point. No anal, no silliness, 5 stars.

Top short.

Great Story and well written, but better the second time through. The short, almost outline treatment works well. A follow-on would be accepted, too. Thank you.

Nice story but it deserved more intro and ending.

Bill S.

Good, well written. Brief, and to the point.

Ouch! Fork in the hand or foot to the nuts... or both, lol. Good story for such a short one.

There is a difference between a short story and a story cut short. This seems to be more of the latter rather than the former. Good potential and what's there is decent. It's just abrupt and lacking.

At first I thought the misplaced kick may have missed the a-hole's balls and overshot to catch the cheating wife under her chin! Net result? Her biting of her lover's "personality"!

Wow! Please say you didn't write this.

Beautiful and short. Nice touch the hand stuck to the wall and he can't cover the incriminating scene. 5 bloody stars !

5 *****

4. Interesting story, just unfortunately with flash stories they leave you wanting more.

He should have kicked her in the jaw after he pined the guys hand to the door way

Snap shot! Perfectly Framed and focused!

Short sweet and to the point or in this case points 😆