All Comments on 'A Vacation in Paradise'

This piece is a little short - should have made it a little longer! But it is very well written. I love how you wrote as the narrator and expressed your feelings and hers :) Well done and keep it up. x

loved the story and the sweetness and intimacy of the couple... and enjoyed the naughtiness in the end.

Erotic and exciting. I could clearly picture every scene.