by PMDlite
Clever - almost didn't need the sexual parts, but it wouldn't be here if it didn't.
So he now has to wait an entire year before he sees Chelsea again. What kind of a relationship is that? This story is similar to that movie "See you next year" where the two lovers were married and they kept cheating on their spouses. If that is the real plot in this story, it should have been in the cheating wives section.
I could see the story; excellent visual writing. But as another commentator wrote, to short. Go long(er). Tell us about the walk home, the sounds, the smells. Was it raining? Or windy. Did her hair float in the breeze? Did your entry light shadow her face? All this and more, when you can.
Nice story, but short.
I hope there is a continuation, where we explain a little more this relationship, so you do not stay in a simple fucking day of St. Valentine.
5 * for you.
I apologize for my English (yet), is not my native language..
Good start to what could be a good story. It needs editing. A more than minor problem is his referral to high school being 20 years ago and his being 28.
Is the reason only on Valentine's day that she's married? So not a romance but cheating. If this is it, I would say erotic coupling.