by Bedu
I couldn't imagine getting past the fird three paragraphs.Just imagine if I did.I imagine I might have liked it.Too slow starting and as you can imagine too many imaginings.
ok, unlike the previous anon's comment i could have done with more drawn out and more detailed! but i genuinely liked it & enjoyed/sympathised with the whole good girl goes bad for the dominant "barbarian" . thought the writing was quite...polite...and hmmm...high brow-ish, dont get je wrong i dont generally like porn script stories but this was quite 'nice' & maybe thats where a longer story with more detail would have come in to offset how you write.
Decent story with some grammar/spelling mistakes. Should be categorized as Erotic Coupling or First Time, not Mature.