All Comments on 'A Wager for a Stranger'

Great writing. Wonderful timing. And, very, very hot!

The only thing that bothered me was the way you switched POV from third person to first person and back again. I'd have felt more comfortable with the technique had you started with her 1st person POV at the beginning of the story.

Let's see some more.

Wow, great first story. Please keep your writing going. You have talent. Thanks

delicious. Thank you.

Wonderful. Keep writing, you have an amazing imagination with excellent imagery.

I loved your story but I have to agree with the previous comment about POV. It did get a bit confusing especially when the last sex scene is written in 3rd person where the first is in 1st person.

Otherwise though, you draw great word pictures. I look forward to reading more from you.

Really liked your story. The POV issue that has been mentioned made it a bit difficult to follow at times. I've seen different writers who are changing perspective use a line of hyphens ----- to indicate a section break so you could see the shift more readily. My only other comment is that a clit doesn't spray cum - nothing comes out of a clit. ;)

Loved it! Please keep writing. You show great promise :) I look forward to more stories from you .

Very unusual start, it really pulls us in to the story. Very interesting use of the themes of danger, nature and voyeurism. I loved it and do not comment on the syntax. Excellent read.

Very exciting build up. Tantalizing. Even with the break and locating her in the bar there was still uncertainty and intrigue.