by SkyOnFyre
It was short, but completely satisfying. Very well-written and an amazing description of events throughout. Pity this author is not writing anymore.
You need to edit yourself better, not least to get your tenses and capitalisation consistent. And there were for me a couple of jarring anachronisms. You clearly went to some effort to 'medievalise' your language but failed on a few occasions. 'Bidded' should be 'bidden'. And 'capitol' is solely a US spelling, in Europe where this is clearly set the word is 'capital'.
Attention to detail will make you the better writer you can be.
You're great. The perfect amount of detail and lust. I only wish you had more than two stories.