by dr_mabeuse
This is fantastic. It's a woman's fantasy, and you capture it sensitively and with a thoughtful imagination. And it's hot as hell! Those of us who were sent to the 'good girls don't' school of sex often fantasize how insatiable we'd be if only we didn't feel so damned guilty about liking sex! You're a wonderful storyteller. Terrific work. Thanks, LJ.
So like the Pakistani weddings I have been to - NOT! I loved her humiliation. Wanted to be the one doing it to her. Nice writing style.
Ridiculous lack of background research here. "Pakistani" isn't a language. Urdu, Sindhi, Punjabi, and Balochi are. The names are also a mess- Deepa is a Hindu name. There are Hindu Pakistanis, of course, but they generally don't have brothers with Arabic names. The slips make this totally unbelievable.
First of all, this is a perspective piece, which means that the lack of familiarity with Pakistani languages and customs would be offered as a part of the narrative to better grant immersion with the doctor's part.
Second of all, the names don't always have to match with region, religion, or regime. Sometimes parents name their children outside of the stereotypical nuances of naming. Sometimes people move to new locals, the point is things happen, and names are as varied as faces, races, and breast sizes, because variety is the spice of life.
Finally, this is clearly a writer with some talent. Let's give credit where credit is due. For someone to criticize a few minor misgivings about names and languages, is utterly pedantic. Particularly when you consider the intended content of the story. Would the story be as good without the thematic and character elements? No. Is the story intended to be pornographic in nature? Yes.
In other words, here at literotica, the point is the porn, not the substance. Don't criticize those authors who add good substance for better story, just because you're well...nuts.
I probably should've checked comment dates before posting, but I'm doing this anyway -- and it's anonymous cause I don't have a Literotica account.
Doctor's Understanding of DHIPA's Need For Constant Humiliation and His Thrill Of Making It Happen Makes Me EXTREMELY Excited Through This Whole Story! VERY WELL WRITTEN!
Hi Dr, 4 starts from me only (compared to your other excellent work) as again the lack of spell check is anoying, plus the scenes have had so much more potential...
This is my favorite literotica piece since years and years ago!
More Dhipa please!! I love the scenes and the humiliation. It always gets me off
Spell checker
I can't, not pickup on the irony of “bikergroschen's” comment about spell checks. …start/star could have slipped by but anoying/annoying might have been caught.
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Good story, thanks. LB
Bit different than what I thought it would be not bad but something is just off but can’t put my finger on it