All Comments on 'A Whole New World Ch. 02'

Needs to be longer may be 2-3 pages. Great story I give 5 stars

Use a proofreader

5/5 awesome story QT_Pie, let me know when you start looking for a proofreader/editor. I'd be happy to help. Your longer story really worked out and you could make them even longer if you wanted to. Some of the best stories have even longer chapters. Keep it up like this and you will join the best of the best this site has to offer.

This site has a selection of proofreaders and editors you can use, but my suggestion is to find either a friend or a fan to help you out. Try them for one or two chapters and see if it works for you, if not, get another.

Good work, keep it up.

Reizo

pretty good but I agree it needs to be a little longer 3 pages max

Please don’t go too much into shopping details. Make sure to emphasis ae more on the fucking details. You wanted to know so, here it is.