by TalyisBagley
TB, you certainly compacted a lot of information and a lot of emotion into this first chapter. I look forward to it's continuation.
Now I'm going to have to squeeze out some spare time to read your previous postings.
Sleep is so overrated!
I found myself nodding in agreement when you started to break down how easy it was to take us over with the help of social media and The Cloud. Not only is your concept not too far-fetched, it's pretty spot on. I have to agree with Steven Hawking on reaching out to Aliens...to paraphrase, if they're technologically far enough ahead of us to get here, they might be coming to wipe us out. Your story brings that viewpoint to life - nice work!
Thank you for reading and for your comments. I so appreciate them. Keep them coming.
If you are wondering what happened to Of Thorn and Pearls (Shy and Tabor's first story before Mercurial Ends) it is available on Kobo Books, Smashwords, and Barnes and Nobel (and a few others I recall).
I am taking a break from my darker-stories and delving into New Adult/YA. I have 1 novel and this series in the works, but my other stories are still chatting me up, but I'm letting them simmer for a while longer.
I really like this story for the emotional content of this story between the mother and daughter. you are very good about revealing the history of this world you have created. I tried to send you a friend request at fetlife, but I do not know if I did it right. I go by the name of hornyoldbob. I did not notice any editing or other problems with this story which means I enjoyed it to much to get distracted by looking for problems. Thank you
Sorry, couldn't get into it until it's edited a bit, I'll check with some later chapters and hopefully you've had some help.
Shouldn't really matter but is the mc black or white? Cause I'm trying to picture the story but I don't know his ethnicity.
I love the flashback - it gives you the story and then the setup all in one shot.